This is two of my cousins. All kids in schools in England have to wear uniforms.
This is the car that my uncle owns, it's a Porsche. He took me for a drive! In this photo I am actually not in the drivers seat...so what do you think that means?
-include interesting, relevant information
-totally unique voice
-a lot of details
-tying things together: making connections
-some listing is there
-connections are unclear
-listing “I like...I like...”
-using the words stuff/things
-squeezing the juiciness out of your writing
-sentences are varied and interesting lengths
-spelling is correct
-proper nouns are capitalized
-end punctuation is used
Written in third person
-it really sounds like someone else wrote it!
-name is used often, or “she/he”, “his/her”
-using your name and sometimes using “I”
-repeating name over and over and over
-”My name is...”
-excessive details used
-photo or drawing includes: message, symbol, space, colour/hue